Inside a singing soul....
Rings a bell of solitude.....
The heart that bore unbounded love.....
Is Sour with lust.....
Fallen for a scorpion...
Left the song in distress...
Mighty sun has an eclipse....
Oh, What am I to ponder??
Only when love matures
Does it show its hues...
For why is a screen of mirage
Mid of water?
Said I am the worst - makes me think
Was I given the best?
Rings a bell of solitude.....
The heart that bore unbounded love.....
Is Sour with lust.....
Fallen for a scorpion...
Left the song in distress...
Mighty sun has an eclipse....
Oh, What am I to ponder??
Only when love matures
Does it show its hues...
For why is a screen of mirage
Mid of water?
Said I am the worst - makes me think
Was I given the best?
"The heart that bore unbounded love.....
ReplyDeleteIs Sour with lust.....
Fallen for a scorpion...
Left the song in distress"
Brilliant lines...the choice of words have been put to gud use...and the feel of the poem is amazing....
"Was I given the best?"
A ques that lurks almost everyone's mind...The bottom line is...ur r the best..dnt think abt if ur getin wats best...now,wait did that make sense :P
Cheers
Tee
These are some finest lines I am reading, and hope this is not gender specific lol! But I think it is a lesson of life, in fact the first lesson of life on how people betray. The first few days’ impression is different, and then comes the shocks!! (Idi, minnal, puyal, mazhai...Naraiya padathula pathirukken)...Nice blog...Keep writing often..
ReplyDeleteThanks Tee!
ReplyDeleteThis is my first attepmt to write a poem. This has been saved on my mobile as drafts for days together. Just got around to blog it up.
The question that lurks me is quite universal I guess! And as said always, lets console ourselves!
Lakshman!!
ReplyDeleteThanks for stopping by here.And nope, they are not gender specific!
You have been seeing too many movies lately, I guess!
A wee bit late to comment, but nevertheless:
ReplyDeleteGuns exploded in me
But I chose to gave light
Said the sun
Of the new founded plight
Eclipsed it was
Till I changed my view
And all the light
Came back to my view
Then did I realize
That all that mattered
Was the point of view
Protecting the spectrum, the range, the hue
The mirage brought me
One with my desire
Reaffirmed my goal
The burn, the fire
As lime it was sour
A honey drop did pour
The solitude dissolved
The scorpion left
The rythm returned
Overcoming the bells of solitude
Again, the song I hummed
P.S.: Brilliant brilliant choice of words.
Its pretty mature stuff for first attempt.. :)
ReplyDeleteLast two lines say a lot..
Thank you Neha.I have written some more, and they lie in drafts. Will post soon ;)
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